Suggestion - Lore

[DarthTyrael]

So yeah, title says it all.
I had a thing in my head and wanted to write it down, post it here perhaps.
I know "Lore" isn't something of a high priority considering development, but nevertheless, here it is. Use it however you (all) want. Feedback is appreciated.

(Note: Second bit might be a bit... well lacking in a way. Inspiration left me a bit.)

The Beginning

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Long ago, there were three nations living in harmony; side by side: The Land of Nature, the Land of Sky and the Land of Earth.
These three nations were aware of one another, but there were no conflicts. They traded and each land prospered in their own way.

The Land of Earth consisted of many rich rock formations and was rich in minerals and metals. The people who lived there thrived of the many riches that resided in the mountains. A vast amount of people were miners, whilst a handful became traders, trading goods to the neighboring lands. The few places that were fertile enough to grow crops were filled with farmers, keeping the land supplied enough should the food supplied through trades fall short.

The Land of Nature was reach in flora and fauna - from trees to berries; from the elegant dragonfly to giant bears - this land was full of life. It's to no surprise that most people that lived here were farmers or hunters.

The Land of Sky was built near the highest of mountains and its people were obsessed with knowledge and new inventions that could set new limits for mankind. These scholars are mostly occupying themselves with reading their scrolls in libraries and experimenting on new types of tools and techniques to better mankind. All of the new tools were founded here; to be sold to the highest bidder.

One day, a meteor struck the ocean, resulting in a massive tear in the country, splitting off one part of the Land of Sky as it slowly drifted off with the tides of the sea.
Hearing the news, the rulers of the Land of the Nature, Sky and Earth, decided to see the damage for themselves and determine the course of action from thereon.

Little did they know...

Later that day, nearing twilight, the rulers and their escorts had arrived - seeing a huge boulder lying within the ocean.
As they discussed on how to act next, the sun set and as the last light had faded, the boulder lit up and transformed, shrinking immensely in size, and then levitating above the ocean - the First Chakra Beast had emerged.
It's appearance was rather shocking - having the head of a bird, a body of a snake, no hind-legs and claws in the front - truly this beast was an oddly peculiar thing to behold.

Thinking this was a gift from the Creator, people immediately started to worship this entity, since it was sent from above and it possessed abilities unlike anything they had seen.

As time passed, it became a tradition throughout the world to embark upon a pilgrimage to honor the Sacred Beast with offerings. Receiving mostly food and sometimes useless trinkets, the Beast grew immensely in a short amount of time.

Three years later, during the Equinox, the Beast started to rampage, causing destruction throughout the Land.
Seeing the power this Beast has, one ruler tried to tame the Beast, but to no avail - and many lives were lost.
The rulers then came to a mutual understanding that they had to combine all of their forces in order to slay the Beast they once worshiped. The Land of Earth mined all the iron they could, forging blades, shurikens and tips for arrows. The Land of Nature produced more food, cut down more forests for arrows and bows. The Land of Sky tried to build some sort of device that allowed their soldiers for prolonged time within the air, so they could ambush the Beast from above.

So it began, that the allied forces of Earth, Nature and Sky charged towards this Sacred Beast with all they had.
Though the beast was nearing exhaustion, it still had enough power to be considered an opponent to be cautious about. Many lives the Beast had taken, as the forces of the Land of Nature and Earth were holding their ground against this Beast.
As they struggled, the forces of the Land of Sky arrived from the air, dropping newly developed bombs upon the Beast.
As it was stunned, all nations' forces charged with all they had and struck the final blow.
Punctured with arrows and spears in all its vital spot, the beast was slain - peace had returned and all the forces cheered.

However...
Shortly after, the corpse of the freshly fallen Beast started to expand to an immense size as strange light entered the body from all around through the pores, then exploding with an scorching bright light.
Those in the direct vicinity were annihilated - not even ashes had remained. Those further away, however, managed to survive...
It took months before those touched by that very same light to realize, that the light had changed them in strange and mysterious ways.
All people that were 'touched' shared the same sensation - a surge of energy from deep within, waiting to be used. Thus those who were touched started to experiment, train and research their new potentials.

They called this power... 'Chakra' - and the things they could do with it - 'Jutsu'.

As their power, knowledge and skills grew, the top tier of this group became the new rulers of the Lands.
Generations passed and with each generation, more off-springs were 'touched' with Chakra.

Shatter the Earth - Rip the Sky - Ravage the Nature: The Villages

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As the population of the world grew evermore, it was mandatory for ties to weaken and for new powers and civilizations to arise.
So it was that with due time, "the Earth shattered, the Sky ripped open and the Nature was ravaged", each country giving birth to new villages:

The Land of Earth - now housing the Haze Village, the Ash Village and the Volcano Village. Once rich in resources, the fate of the Land now rests upon the Volcano Village as being their only supplier goods that they can trade for goods. The Ash Village is covered by the ashes scattered by the neighboring volcanoes and life is harsh for those born in it. Haze Village is well-known for its hot springs and healing waters.

The Land of Sky - now housing the Thunder Village, the Snow Village and the Shockwave Village. Most scholars have nested in the Thunder Village - nowadays known as the most technological advanced village - whilst most of the demolition scholars have decided to move to Shockwave Village.
As for Snow Village - which resides upon the island that was torn asunder from the rest of the Land of the Sky by the first chakra beast - , they were cut off from the rest of the world but nevertheless their knowledge and skills have helped them survive the many years of seclusion and have never ceased to thrive in their own, somewhat primitive way.

The Land of Nature - now housing the Hills Village, the Forest Village and the Dust Village. Perhaps this land has changed the least, aside from the Dust Village. Due to the time of the Sacred Beast, this part of the land has had its resources pillaged so harshly that flora could not grow here any longer for a long time. That is until people settled here, in desperate need of food and water.
Still, life in the Dust Village is not as pretty as its sibling Villages and somewhat comparable to  Ash and Haze - hence the somewhat allied ties with these villages. Traders from the Ash and Haze Village tend to travel here to exchange goods for food gathered in Forest and Hills. Luckily, what the traders - the most common occupation for the Dust villagers - lack in resources, they make up for in currency.

As time went by, chaos reigned deep within the Volcano Village, as a group of villagers - called the "Guerrilla of Gehenna" - dared to believe to be able to overthrow their current ruler with their leader. As they plotted, their actions grew more severe every time - from assault to inflicting terror, nothing was too severe. In the end, they were defeated, and the entire group was exiled from the village to the far more severe, harsh terrain with far more volcanic activity then in the entire Volcano Village.

But that didn't stop them. They learned how to adapt and thrived and never stopped holding a grudge against the village that wronged them. They built a new village, which is now known as the "Inferno Village".

In the Land of the Sky however, there was not much chaos at the moment - rather a prosperous time. As some craftsmen and traders knew far too well, the Land of Sky held one of the most knowledgeable and wise craftsmen. Some decided their luck and joined the village that held these wise men, others decided to settle near an environment that was rich with resources, in hope that their trades would succeed in some way, selling basic tools and weaponry to those willing to buy them.

The latter of the group later came to be known as the "Metal Village".

And thus our story begins...

Again, let me know what you think of it.

[Toratsume Nyshn]

You forgot about the Hidden metal!!!
How dank of you :3
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Anyways... nice beginnings... gonna be following it

[DarthTyrael]

You forgot about the Hidden metal!!!
How dank of you :3
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Anyways... nice beginnings... gonna be following it

As I said - it was lacking. The creation of both Inferno and Metal are not in there. Wanted their creation to start later in the SLO timeline (perhaps some volcano people rebelled, grew lust for power and called themselves independent)
Thank you for the feedback though.

[Toratsume Nyshn]

As I said - it was lacking. The creation of both Inferno and Metal are not in there. Wanted their creation to start later in the SLO timeline (perhaps some volcano people rebelled, grew lust for power and called themselves independent)
Thank you for the feedback though.

Ok...
But won't hidden metal be the most technologically advanced village??

[Manuster]

omg omg omg dank asf

you can write about so many clans and orgs and stuff and development of jutsu types and arhehterhrtghaezrg

[DarthTyrael]

As I said - it was lacking. The creation of both Inferno and Metal are not in there. Wanted their creation to start later in the SLO timeline (perhaps some volcano people rebelled, grew lust for power and called themselves independent)
Thank you for the feedback though.

Ok...
But won't hidden metal be the most technologically advanced village??

As far as I know from sources - Hidden Thunder was the most futuristic/technologically advanced village.
But then again, my sources could be wrong.



UPDATE: Added hidden inferno and metal.

[Manuster]

As I said - it was lacking. The creation of both Inferno and Metal are not in there. Wanted their creation to start later in the SLO timeline (perhaps some volcano people rebelled, grew lust for power and called themselves independent)
Thank you for the feedback though.

Ok...
But won't hidden metal be the most technologically advanced village??

As far as I know from sources - Hidden Thunder was the most futuristic/technologically advanced village.
But then again, my sources could be wrong.



UPDATE: Added hidden inferno and metal.

ofc your sources are wrong, they're YOUR sources

[Dragon6624]

ofc your sources are wrong, they're YOUR sources

Heheheh -- but seriously, if you think on it, it would make a bit more sense that the Hidden Thunder would be more technologically advanced. Metal wrought does shape the gear, whose cogs may be propelled by water and fire -- but it is ultimately electricity, the commodity most developed within the Hidden Thunder, that can truly bring out the greatest potential from said metal.

But for this lore suggestion in itself, I personally thought it was suitable enough -- though, if not permanently, at least as a starting foundation for further improvements/additions.

Although, I do still have one question scratching at the back of my mind: If this "Beast of the stars" is largely chakra, what would possibly harm it? Upon death, it's explosive demise *incinerated* those nearby, leading me to believe mere bombs would be fairly...harmless...with the same going for basic arrows, shuriken, blades, and regular soldiers. Not to forget, these were still regular humans -- the fighters that hoped to stall the Nine-Tailed-Fox from Naruto at *least* had *some* chakra-based abilities at their disposal, and even their massive engagement was only meant to stall the damned monstrosity until someone more powerful could come along. How and why, then, would the armies of these three nations even *consider* harming such a beast?

Allow me to propose an example for a quick rider/alternative (Edit: The 'quick' example unraveled into a good 3-4 paragraph historical outline...don't blame me, my fingers have minds of their own):

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Mankind and these "Mega-Beasts" existed at around the same time period, though by the time humans came along, the beasts --much akin to Mammoths in our reality-- were already dwindling, and this would later help to explain their rarity. These beasts were massive in scale, with the smallest among them reaching at least half-height to the ancient trees that covered certain sections of the world (we'll say about four-five stories). These creatures, mostly primitive in nature, would often contest one another's grounds, as was the sacred custom of nature in that only the strongest could survive. Some would be slain, and man --opportunistic then as they are today, if only a bit less cunning-- took advantage of these contests, and would harbor about dueling grounds, that they might scavenge the corpses of the fallen for sustenance...and eventually...power.

This "Power" was strange, and it took generations to even begin to show signs of its merging within Humanity's genomes. Over the courses of time, 'some' recognized the 'unnatural' "Power" they held over others of their kind, and at once started to make use of it -- some for more innocent and childish purposes...others, for matters far more...profitable. Tribes began to worship their "Chosen", and these "Chosen" in turn began to worship themselves, taking their 'rightful' places among the elite of these societies; And seeing fit to expand their influence, it was under the mighty shadow of the "Chakra Beasts" that conflict was waged. And since the Great Beasts resembled so much of the "Power" that these echelons possessed, it was only natural that with time, the two names became correlated, and then conjugated.

...But still, others saw fit to remain indifferent to these feuds for "Chakra". These wise figures --armed only with their minds and what Chakra had been gifted to them from birth-- sought to study and learn from the great beasts that ruled the earth, and indeed, they did in time observe, understand and experiment with what could be done with this "Chakra". Though, it is true, men's hearts are corrupted by greed, and it was even among this minority that the evil of ambition did taint the minds of so many of the wise. And these wise put their newfound knowledge to the test through conquest, destruction and...evolution. For you see, man now sought to bend nature to his will, and in doing so, he also sought to bend the *rules* of the world and the natural order. From this ambition --not to forget, the lives of many countless lost in the quest for knowledge and "Chakra"-- was born a new mentality -- Humans need not live 'under' the shadow of the beast...rather, they would encompass it, and it would be the mighty Chakra-Beasts who next felt the scorch and the lash of a developing humanity.

Time would pass, and with it, so too would pass the age of wondrous Chakra-Beasts being common-place -- their subjugation and extermination lent to the ever fading rarities of their presence in the modern day. And so too, as these beasts passed on, did that age among the now predominant Humans fade away into the chaotic discourse of history, with only fragments being preserved from that fiery era. No longer able to rely upon the power of their previous wonders, men took instead to honing the Chakra that they currently possessed, even as it became weaker through a lack of its prior source and an increase in the diverse breeding environments. They continued to war, as all humans have and will continue to do, but instead found sanctuary in the cultivation of city-states...though some 'primitives' still chose to live among their former tribes, unfavorable of these mass settlements and the discarding of past traditions. The tribes are still found to this day, though mere shadows of their ancestral days, and more than likely hidden in contrast to the large populaces of the Hidden Villages that now hold sway over the 'civilized' world.

*Cringes upon seeing the light of consciousness reach him from outside of the Cavern of Text* "What?...Where am I? I thought I heard...the echoes of a thousand words rambling in the air...

...Huh, no worries then. Anyway, the above should --in my opinion-- offer some ideas to help improve upon Tyrael's original idea...at least I hope as  much, I'm not sure if the lot of you will instead find it entirely pointless in comparison. Guess we'll have to wait to find out." ~He stated to the empty winds

*Dusts self off before returning to civilization*

[DarthTyrael]

@dragon6624 I see what you mean, and it's a great story with lots of details in it!

"But for this lore suggestion in itself, I personally thought it was suitable enough -- though, if not permanently, at least as a starting foundation for further improvements/additions."

Is exactly why I made this post, as a stepping stone for future dev.

Yes, the battle described in my story maybe somewhat... Unrealistic. And it may be strange that there's only 1 chakra beast in this story.

However I kept in my mind that the Chakra Beasts maybe some kind of Boss Event thing, therefore I chose this way of including it in my story, rather than the Beast being a natural habitant of the SLO world, it arrived from outer space.
And though it may be a powerful beast filled with Chakra, it's a beast nonetheless. It has its weak spots, just like any other.

This would eradicate the idea of leading the beasts to total extinction, should they become implemented in the game.

I might rewrite how the chakra beast fell and how mankind came to acquire chakra, but I'd have to think about it / read your story with more focus than what I have now a couple of times in some other time.

Thank you for the serious feedback and I'll most certainly take it with me (maybe not for this story but certainly for future roleplaying).

[Dragon6624]

This would eradicate the idea of leading the beasts to total extinction, should they become implemented in the game.

I probably should've used "genocide" instead of "extermination" -- the point was merely that these chakra beasts became rarities because humanity both used them in warfare, and also hunted them down for personal gain (more chakra consumption).

Thanks for taking it into consideration all the same, though I'd suggest you try to avoid my terrible sentence-structuring for RP >_).

Best of luck with its improvement.

[Mars]

Although, I do still have one question scratching at the back of my mind: If this "Beast of the stars" is largely chakra, what would possibly harm it?

[DarthTyrael]

Update:
- Added bit more detail to land, beast, fight and profession per land.
- Beast now fatigued during fight, making its death seem more viable.
- Grammar Nazi has swung by and beated the shit out of me.
- Removed "Hidden" from the names of the villages.

[Manuster]

- Grammar Nazi has swung by and beat the shit out of me.

lmao xDD