Good job Snoopy, I can always count on you to deliver a good read
There are some things that I'd like to point out though:
He slid the bag further up his left arm, and protruded his hand towards the plastic bag on the other side.
If your story and/or SLO take place in a universe that's technology-wise just like the one in Naruto, then I don't think that there would be any plastic bags.
- He was of African origin.
Considering the story's theme, it feels out of place to see it phrased like that.
It was a game of cat and mouse as the figure began pouncing back and forth from tree to tree, dodging every single attack with ease and finesse.
I'm not sure if Hokorigakure will have any/enough trees to do that.
I'm sorry if it felt like I was nitpicking, but I just wanted to point out the things that seemed odd to me.
Good luck on your next chapter, I'm looking forward to reading it
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