Shinobi Life Online
Shinobi Life Online Category => Shinobi Life Online Character => Topic started by: Orochi on October 17, 2015, 10:58:15
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Name: Orochi Akira
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Height: 1,79 cm
Weight: 70 kg
Hairstyle: Long
Facial hair: -
Hair color: black
Eye color: Red
Blood type: 0
Primary chakra nature: Fire
Village: Okagakure
Clan: Akira
Good or evil at heart?: Mercenary
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There will be no konoha to pick from, the village which resembles that the most will be called the hidden hill. I think vreg should post the hidden villages thread onto slo character thread, and make it say read b4 posting.
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So I need to pick another village?
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http://www.shinobilifeonline.com/index.php/topic,732.0.html there, all the planned villages, choose one from these
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Ok , thx , I've edited it! :D
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Name: Orochi Akira
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Height: 1,79 cm
Weight: 70 kg
Hairstyle: Long
Facial hair: -
Hair color: black
Eye color: Red
Blood type: 0
Primary chakra nature: Fire
Village: Okagakure
Clan: Akira
Good or evil at heart?: Mercenary
Everything here looks pretty good save the absence of any sort of character backstory/personality description. Do remember that a backstory makes more sense when written in the perspective of the character's life up until the start of the game; so try not to write out his whole life, as it hasn't happened yet, right?
"Mercenary" is a profession, not a character's nature. Try something along the lines of a "Grey-Zone" or "Does what he has to in order to survive". Also, this should tie in with your character's personality description.
Good luck.
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Oh, Mercenary is definitely a character trait. Being held up for my own lost phone and forced to make exact change taught me that.